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My  Favorite Magazine


My favorite magazine is ELLE which is a fashion magazine. The content of this magazine contains various
latest  fashionable costumes and well-made cosmectics throughout the world. Besides, it introduces many  celebrities of the fashion stage and tells us how to dress ourselves and how to make up. It seems that this magazine has nothing to do with my high school study. However, things are not like what they seem.  Why I love reading this magazine is that it can bring something new to my world, and some clothes designers tell us some stories about themselves which alway impress me.  I can know how a designer becomes a well-known person through his or her hard work . Those touching stories teach me how to persevere in working out something difficult  in my study and how to be strong when meeting with difficulties in life. Furthermore, When i read the eye-catching pictures, I will forget all the troubles and anxieties in life. Will you spend some time  reading this magazine after my introduction ?  I hope you will.

I hope you can give me some suggestions on this article and i hope the language of the composition will be more authentic after your revise,   thanks!!

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My  Favorite Magazine


My favorite magazine is ELLE which is a fashion magazine. The magazine contains various
latest  fashionable costumes and well-made cosmectics throughout the world. Besides, it introduces many  celebrities of the fashion stage and tells us how to dress ourselves and how to make up. It seems that this magazine has nothing to do with my high school study. However, things are not like what they seem to be.  The reason why I love reading this magazine is that it can bring something new to my world, and some clothes designers tell us some stories about themselves which alway impress me.  I can know how a designer becomes a well-known person through his or her hard work . Those touching stories teach me how to persevere in working out something difficult  in my study and how to be strong when meeting with difficulties in life. Furthermore, When i read the eye-catching pictures, I will forget all the troubles and anxieties in life. Will you spend some time  reading this magazine after my introduction ?  I hope you will.

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i want to be peter pan

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Post time 2008-3-10 16:51:42 |Display all floors
首先,你的题目就有问题。
help sb DO sth.
不是
help sb TO DO sth.

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