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寂静的我独坐在寂静的夜 C-E [Copy link] 中文

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Post time 2007-4-5 08:18:31 |Display all floors
Originally posted by dreamland at 2007-4-4 23:35
Sitting alone in the night that was just as quiet as me,  until those pictures of the past came to me without a notice, tear would well up in the eyes, and even overflow when I hold up the pen. Bey ...



I appreciate dreamland's translation. It's wonderful!

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Post time 2007-4-5 11:06:48 |Display all floors
寂静的我独坐在寂静的夜,那些生活的影子便不期而至,眼窝里就会涌出泪水,提笔则更是泪流不止,毫无办法,已成疾。
On those lonesome nights, seated still and alone, overwhelmed by the shadow of the past, I wept my bitter tears. More so when I grabbed my pen. How could I stop it? It had ubsided into an inveterate disease.
If winter comes, can spring be frozen ahead?

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Post time 2007-4-5 11:12:11 |Display all floors
Whenever I sat alone in the silent night, the shadows of that other life would catch up with me and feel my eyes with tears,

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Post time 2007-4-5 14:29:17 |Display all floors
Sitting quietly in the silent night,I couldn’t help weeping,coz shadows of life are always coming to my mind.Especially when I take up my pen,my eyes welled tears of sorrow,and i have no other choice.it has become a sickness.

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Post time 2007-4-5 17:00:30 |Display all floors

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虽然散文类的东西对于文法方面抠的不是很死,但是如果有条件的话我觉得还是尽量去避免语法上的瑕疵。楼主的“Sitting silently in silent nights"之后跟主语"shadows "似乎有点不应该,也看不出这样写的必要,用一句“In a silent/tranquil night I sit quietly/silently”就能够化解。有点鸡蛋里头挑骨头的嫌疑,见笑了。

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Post time 2007-4-5 17:06:20 |Display all floors
Originally posted by waxman at 2007-4-5 17:00
虽然散文类的东西对于文法方面抠的不是很死,但是如果有条件的话我觉得还是尽量去避免语法上的瑕疵。楼主的“Sitting silently in silent nights"之后跟主语"shadows "似乎有点不应该,也看不出这 ...



对对对!这语法上错了!成了shadows在那sitting了。

多谢指出!

仔细看了一下,其实上面 rovi297 已指出了此错误,我没有注意到。一并感谢!

[ Last edited by copchen at 2007-4-5 05:19 PM ]

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