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[原创] [poem] with the moonlight [Copy link] 中文

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Post time 2006-12-8 14:47:27 |Display all floors
from high above in the clear, dark sky
she looks down
with a mysterious smile
and her light reflects on the water

the tip of my finger feels
a piercing pain
the water is as soft as her light
i forgot it is icy cold

the sunrise comes to light the sky
not a moment to spare
i cry to her fading image:
tonight we'll meet where you rise

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Post time 2006-12-8 19:57:49 |Display all floors
Good~!
我感觉这一直是在说倒影,不知道猜对了没有;-)

[ Last edited by hly2006 at 2006-12-8 07:59 PM ]

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Post time 2006-12-9 03:01:05 |Display all floors
wow! hly, you are so smart! yes, i did mean the reflection of the moon in the water. i saw her smiling at me from above and her image in the water. the moonlight is so soft. i wanted to touch her in the water. but i forgot the water is cold and got my fingers bitten. when sunrise came, i would have to let her go. i told her i would be here waiting for her when the sky turned dark once again.

第一段说月亮神秘和水面月影;第二段说手指触碰水中月,被柔和但冰冷的水刺痛;第三段说朝日不等时,与月约会须待白昼尽。

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Post time 2006-12-9 15:22:47 |Display all floors
How nice, nyleda! Wow, it's beautiful.
中文我不会读也不会写。Really, I don't.

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Post time 2006-12-9 15:34:30 |Display all floors
oh, i wish i could write poem, too

just some puzzles here:
why "dark" sky since there is moonlight?
why "forgot" but not "forget"?

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Post time 2006-12-9 19:54:58 |Display all floors
Originally posted by nolittleone at 2006-12-8 11:34 PM
just some puzzles here:
why "dark" sky since there is moonlight?
why "forgot" but not "forget"?
The picture below answers your first question.

I'll take the liberty of answering the second for nyleda:

the tip of my finger feels
a piercing pain
…i forgot it is icy cold


"forgot" → at the time "I" dipped my finger (just before)

If it was "forget" it would sound as if "I" felt the piercing pain and then immediately forgot the water is icy cold.
moonlight.jpg
中文我不会读也不会写。Really, I don't.

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Post time 2006-12-10 18:09:15 |Display all floors
Originally posted by jeff_in_sf at 2006-12-9 19:54

The picture below answers your first question.

oh jeff! many many thanks! the picture is gorgeous! it is a perfect match for my poem and can't be any better.

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