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Post time 2006-5-7 11:42:34 |Display all floors
Thank you Both:-)
andrewyan, your polishement is very good!!
too good for a high school student.:)

[ Last edited by hiy2004 at 2006-5-7 11:46 AM ]
理解=>表达=》润色
understanding+expressing+polishing

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Post time 2006-5-7 12:18:43 |Display all floors
很幸运,我出生在一个充满爱心和崇尚个人奋斗的家庭。
Fortunately, I was born in a family full of love and esteeming self-made success.

我父母在我成长过程中,发挥了巨大的引导作用
During my growth, my parents played a important role as a mentor.

在当地、在同龄人中就开始接受最好的教育
when in the kindergarten, primary school and junior high school,I received the best education than peers in my town.

2003年7月,我经过层层选拔,考入XX的唯一的一个全国班。
In July, 2003. I was enrolled ring upon ring by XX., and became a student of the unique countrywide class.

这在中国所谓“小皇帝”的一代人中是非常不容易的,因为在我的同龄人中,这个年龄段都依赖父母,大多数人过着“饭来张口、衣来伸手”的生活。

This is not easy for my generation whom were often chaffed as "little emperors". Because in my generation, most teenagers extremely depends on their parents and enjoy an emperor-like life where you don't need to do anything by yourselves.

因为我觉得在同龄人之中我是非常优秀的。
because I reckon that I'm outstanding among my peers.

同时,我家族事业的发展
Meanwhile, the development of my family business

第一代人创业之后,企业能否基业常青,接班人的培养非常重要
After the enterprise carved out by the first generation, whether the enterprise will keep flourishing perennially depends on the quality of successors.

推动
propell

充分证明自己的能力和个性
it will fully testify my personal ability, and personality

在更大的舞台上
on a wider arena

将来也有机会为推动中美这两个大国之间的经济技术交流做出贡献。
I may get the opptunity to expedite economic and technology exchanges between the two mammothes, China and America.

我相信我父母的眼光
I believe my parents' forsight

在我身上的教育投资比买房、买车、买地的投资更会有更大的受益。
their investment on my education will get more benefits than buying houses, cars or real estates.

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Post time 2006-5-7 12:21:30 |Display all floors

好强啊!

理解=>表达=》润色
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Post time 2006-5-7 12:36:14 |Display all floors
the two mammothes?可以吗?
理解=>表达=》润色
understanding+expressing+polishing

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Post time 2006-5-7 13:29:34 |Display all floors
出于好玩用the two mammothes的
文章的重点不在这里,直接用China and America好了

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