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This post was edited by expatter at 2012-12-23 21:00

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Zuo Shuhan is seven years old this year, except her bald head and pale face, she is no difference with other normal gilrs who love danceing, singing, playing arond and having their own dreams. However, she is suffering from neuroblastoma and still needs radiotherapy.


Zuo Shuhan lives in a small house which is less than 5 square meters with her parents. She loves Snow White the most, and always imagines herself wearing a princess derss and a tiara. She wishes badly that her illness could be cured, then she can go back to her hometown and wear a pricess dress.


Zuo Xiaolong and Jiang Xue are her parents, and this coulpe have made a great decision, which is to cure little shuhan's illness no matter what.  Therefore, they take shuhan to Beijng and seek for good treatments, leaving their younger daughter at home in Shanxi, taken care by their aged parents.


The lively and cherrful shuhan loves dancing very much. When in hospital, she always bounces up and down on the bed and gives her performance to other patients who share the same room with her. Different from other kids who are always terrified to to go see the doctor, shuhan is always happy every time she goes to see the doctor. " This can make my illness be cured sonner, then I can go back home, go to kindergarden, and sing, dance and play with my younger sister."


Zuo Shuhan stands in fornt of the door of her small house. She and her parents live in a house which is less than 5 square meters. This is a cottage area, and people who live here are all immigrant workers.


Zuo Shuhan is photographing for her parents. Shuhan's father is only 36 years old, but he already has grey hairs on his temples. The light green T-shirt of her mother is given by their neighbours. In order to cure their daughter's illness, this couple haven't bought any new clothes for two years.

I like this translation and is has some nice expressions and clauses and is therefore more sophisticated than some of the others here. But it is redolent with numerous and silly spelling mistakes which spoil it.

Please try this competition again another week and I look forward to you being in the top three positions ………..





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For clarity I have:


1) DSseeing

2) rainy_weather

3) Lizachen



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expatter Post time: 2012-12-23 20:51
OK  …………   !

Thank you to DSseeing, waiboshu and sinoecocleaner for their kind comments for my  ...

, Wow, Great job, expatter, I really appeciate the corrections on my translation.
Looking forward to the next round.

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LoneAcorn Post time: 2012-12-22 11:33
DSeeing:

The script is taken from "Seriously ill children and their sweet little dreams "Zuo Shu ...

The correction marks you made are so well-organized.
Thank you for the comments.

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rainyweather Post time: 2012-12-22 16:51
thank you so much.

You're welcome

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Ratfink Post time: 2012-12-23 09:06
Again a good standard overall was presented in this the second translation contest. Lonearcorn has b ...

Thank you Ratfink for your kind comments

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voice_cd Post time: 2012-12-23 09:14
Thanks for such detailed and excellent comments to each entry of our participants, Acorn! We reall ...

I really appreciate your kind comment. Thanks!

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