Jiao, who had converted himself to Buddhism for years, was keeping a lover relation with a female benefactor all the time. One day, the amative monk, worrying about his scandal being disclosed, strangled his lover on a hotel's bed. He delivered himself to the police the next day.
A monk surnamed Jiao, who has been practiced for many years, kept an affair with a female benefector. Fearing the leakage of the scandal, one day he strangled her to death on a bed in hotel, and turned himeslf in the next day, fearing the punishment of his committed crime.
Jiao, who had converted himself to Buddhism for years, and has been keeping a romance relationship with a female benefactor all the time.
One day, this amative monk strangled his lover in a bed of a hotel room and turned himself in to the police on the next day for worrying about his scandal being disclosed.
[ Last edited by felicitysam at 2006-9-8 02:12 PM ]
Jiao, who had became a Buddhist years ago, had an affair with a female benefactor the entire time. One day, the amorous monk, worried that his secret might be disclosed, strangled his lover on the bed in a hotel room. He turned himself to the police the next day.
became a Buddhist = converted to Buddhism (not "converted himself") or practiced Buddhism (depending on what you mean)
I liked either "turned himself in" or "delivered himself to the police."
Avoid "surnamed." It might be technically correct but it's very rarely used as a way of saying "his surname is…." in a regular news story. (You might use it to make a specific point about a surname: "After he legally changed his name, John, now surnamed Smith…)