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Post time 2006-5-9 14:15:37 |Display all floors
富含荷荷芭油( Jojoba oil)、橄榄油 (Olive oil)等多种天然成份带给您丝般的顺滑、柔嫩感受使肌肤在按摩之后滋润、光滑、不紧绷其中的天然薄荷脑带给人清新舒爽的感受它独特而具有穿透力的气味舒缓压力,放松身心        Various kinds of natural ingredients, rich in Jojoba oil and Olive oil, not only nurture your skin with the sense of silky smoothness and tenderness, but also retain your skin in a moisturing, clear and tightless condition after your skin is massaged with this product. And moreover the Menthol will give you a sense of freshness and comfort. Its distinctively penetrating odor relieves you of your strains and relaxes the mind and body.
克丽缇娜 CHLITINA 以多种天然油脂精心调制的舒心草本按摩霜,把每一次触碰都变成呵护。使用舒心草本按摩霜对身体局部做细致的按摩,缓缓舒展倦怠的筋骨,让积郁的疲惫和紧张感离你远去,唯有舒爽感受长久逗留。纯天然的荷荷芭油犹如遮蔽烈阳的浮云,为您娇嫩而易在按摩中承受磨损的肌肤带来滋养呵护;清新的薄荷脑犹如夏日清凉的海水,为您在压力下陷入疲惫的身心添注保护与关爱。无论何时,何地,挥去城市的喧嚣与浮躁,沉浸在舒缓、温柔的静谧时分里,享受SPA般的舒心和畅快,拥有舒心草本按摩霜,这将不再是梦想。         CHLITINA’s Cozy Herbal Massage Cream, specially prepared with various kinds of natural greases, protects your delicate skin free of any harm each time you apply it to your skin.Cozy Herbal Massage Cream can produce the effect of delicate massage on the parts of your body, thus it slowly limbers up your languid muscles and joints, driving away your fatigue and strains leaving a feeling of exceptional coolness and comfort. The pure natural Jojoba oil functions as if the floating clouds sheltered your skin from the strong sunlight, protecting your tender skin and nurturing the harmed skin caused by massaging; The fresh menthol adds more protection and care to your fatigued mind and body under the pressure of daily life just like the cool sea water in the summer. Wherever and whenever you are immersed in tranquil atmosphere of relaxation and softness by casting off all the hustle and bustle and the impulsiveness, you can get a kick out of using Cozy Herbal Massage Cream, feeling rather happy and relaxed, which is not a distant dream any more!
用途:滋润肌肤用法:洁肤后,取适量涂抹于相应部位,按摩后拭净。保存方法:置于阴凉干燥处,避免高温及阳光曝晒。注意事项:若出现不适现象,请立即停止使用。限期使用日期:标示于盒底生产批号:标示于管尾        Purpose: Nourishing skinInstruction: After cleaning your skin, you can apply a little of this product onto the corresponding parts of your body, but wipe it off after a massage.Preserving method: store in a cool and dry place and avoid being directly exposed to high temperature and sunlight.Caution: If there appears any discomfort, please stop using it immediately.  Expiry Date of Time limit: Marked at the bottom of the box.Product Batch No. Marked at the end of the cream tube.

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Post time 2006-5-9 14:28:18 |Display all floors
只看了英文部分,感觉不错.

retain your skin in a moisturing, clear and tightless condition :把retain改为keep如何?
protects your delicate skin free of any harm :  "free of"改为from.

harmed skin: damaged skin (感觉harm有主观性)

Expiry Date of Time limit???

[ Last edited by gratewall at 2006-5-9 02:53 PM ]

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Post time 2006-5-9 14:42:11 |Display all floors
谢谢

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Post time 2006-5-9 14:46:32 |Display all floors
我倒是见过:
The expiry date of that time limit shall be mentioned in the notification.

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Post time 2006-5-9 14:53:28 |Display all floors
with the sense -->with a sense of

retain your skin 感觉象是"能保住您的皮肤"??!!
应该是retain moisture of your skin把

The pure natural Jojoba oil functions as if the floating clouds sheltered your skin from the strong sunlight,

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The pure natural Jojoba oil functions as floating clouds, sheltering your skin from the strong sunlight,

[ Last edited by hiy2004 at 2006-5-9 02:59 PM ]
理解=>表达=》润色
understanding+expressing+polishing

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Post time 2006-5-9 14:57:59 |Display all floors
Expiry Date 就够清楚了吗?  我觉得那个句子有点chinglish之嫌,大概想说maximum expiry date.但产品有效期还来个minimum,maximum的很少见,给人的感觉很不严谨.

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Post time 2006-5-9 14:58:49 |Display all floors
谢谢hiy2004的指教,不过我才只有高中生的那点水平呀!!!

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